My name is Justine,and I'm going to tell you about my life.I go to Saticoy school im in fifth grade in a awsome class.
My BFF Shi [Shiara] sits right next to me.My other buds names are Cierra and Julie.There cool people.My sister,Bailey[she's a dog] is seven years old. Shes really fat.I say shes part cow.But hey,thats how I roll.
Now, lets talk about Mom.The thing about my mom is that she is an alien! JUST KIDDING!!!!Shes a twin.Once her sister picked me up from school, and I thought it was Mama.I will never make that mistake again.My bro is a football player.And BELIEVE me, I take advantage of it.My Dad's a HUGE Raider's fan.Raiders are awsome.Their the best team ever.
My favorite hobbies are tennis and swimming. I used to play tennis and I'm great in both, but, Im not a sports kind of person.Actually,im a weakling.Im a good speller, though.I have been in the spelling bee before.I was really good!I am also a shark expert.Sharks are my favorite animals.I dont know why,but the first time I saw "Jaws"[when I was five!] I just fell in love with them! When my mom went in my room,I'd be researching sharks. Im not a expert in everything, though.I HATE MATH!Math and I just dont agree.I need help in math,big time.The teacher would be like," Whats two plus two?" and I be like "Cake!"Perhapes I really need help!
Next,i'm gonna tell you about my personal goals.When I become older, I want to be an actress or Marine Biologist.
My academic goals are going to College and degree in Marine Biology. That would be great.
Well, I guess that's it. Three cheers for a new school year!:)
Reader Feedback Justine your writing has a lot of voice and creativity. You still need to fix your spelling and capitalization, as well as separate your ideas into paragraphs. What are some of your goals? Where do you swim and play tennis? Add some details, and you will have a great essay!-- Mrs. Geib
My name is Justine,and I'm going to tell you about my life.I go to Saticoy school im in fifth grade in a awsome class.
My BFF Shi [Shiara] sits right next to me.My other buds names are Cierra and Julie.There cool people.My sister,Bailey[she's a dog] is seven years old. Shes really fat.I say shes part cow.But hey,thats how I roll.
Now, lets talk about Mom.The thing about my mom is that she is an alien! JUST KIDDING!!!!Shes a twin.Once her sister picked me up from school, and I thought it was Mama.I will never make that mistake again.My bro is a football player.And BELIEVE me, I take advantage of it.My Dad's a HUGE Raider's fan.Raiders are awsome.Their the best team ever.
My favorite hobbies are tennis and swimming. I used to play tennis and I'm great in both, but, Im not a sports kind of person.Actually,im a weakling.Im a good speller, though.I have been in the spelling bee before.I was really good!I am also a shark expert.Sharks are my favorite animals.I dont know why,but the first time I saw "Jaws"[when I was five!] I just fell in love with them! When my mom went in my room,I'd be researching sharks. Im not a expert in everything, though.I HATE MATH!Math and I just dont agree.I need help in math,big time.The teacher would be like," Whats two plus two?" and I be like "Cake!"Perhapes I really need help!
Next,i'm gonna tell you about my personal goals.When I become older, I want to be an actress or Marine Biologist.
My academic goals are going to College and degree in Marine Biology. That would be great.
Well, I guess that's it. Three cheers for a new school year!:)
Reader Feedback
Justine your writing has a lot of voice and creativity. You still need to fix your spelling and capitalization, as well as separate your ideas into paragraphs. What are some of your goals? Where do you swim and play tennis? Add some details, and you will have a great essay!-- Mrs. Geib